You stole a glance from me
Approached me cautiously
Put me on your pedestal
Said I could fly
and so I try
You look into my eyes
Wrap me in your linen lies
Try to scream
Voice abandons me
I shake
Close my eyes
God, make me liquid
Too fluid for your hands
your touch, your clutch, so cold
I shut my eyes
You steal my I
my soul, my zealous high
A sudden wind
Disdain
I jumped
falling..
fast..
...Felt your noose around my neck..
..and there I hang.
©2008 ~Salva-Veritate
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She was forced and deceived into the act. He made her believe she could "fly", do anything she dreamed of. She trusted him, she tried to "fly" only to realize his true intentions. It was too late though. He raped her, "hung her". Ultimate betrayal.
**The jumping and noose thing is figurative. The poem is about getting raped/molested. Thats why "linen lies", you know linen like bedsheets, and well she shakes (also out of fear).While this girl was being raped she prayed to God she was liquid, so fluid the guy would not be able to grasp her and be doing what he was doing.
**The jumping and noose thing is figurative. The poem is about getting raped/molested. Thats why "linen lies", you know linen like bedsheets, and well she shakes (also out of fear).While this girl was being raped she prayed to God she was liquid, so fluid the guy would not be able to grasp her and be doing what he was doing.
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“Does feminist mean large unpleasant person who'll shout at you or someone who believes women are human beings. To me it's the latter, so I sign up.”
~Margaret Atwood
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It's not the size of the ship, it's the motion of the ocean. (But it takes a long time to get to England in a rowboat.)
Hoorah for double entendres, my friends. 8D
Feel free to correct me please!
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“Does feminist mean large unpleasant person who'll shout at you or someone who believes women are human beings. To me it's the latter, so I sign up.”
~Margaret Atwood
"You steal my I" seems questionable. I'm not entirely sure if you meant "eye" or if you actually meant "I" as in what makes you who you are. Either way, it suits the poem, so I was debating over pointing it out or not.
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It's not the size of the ship, it's the motion of the ocean. (But it takes a long time to get to England in a rowboat.)
Hoorah for double entendres, my friends. 8D
thanks, I didnt see that! lol
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“Does feminist mean large unpleasant person who'll shout at you or someone who believes women are human beings. To me it's the latter, so I sign up.”
~Margaret Atwood
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“Does feminist mean large unpleasant person who'll shout at you or someone who believes women are human beings. To me it's the latter, so I sign up.”
~Margaret Atwood
You're welcome. <3 It's a lovely poem, have you thought of submitting it to poetry.com?
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It's not the size of the ship, it's the motion of the ocean. (But it takes a long time to get to England in a rowboat.)
Hoorah for double entendres, my friends. 8D
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It's not the size of the ship, it's the motion of the ocean. (But it takes a long time to get to England in a rowboat.)
Hoorah for double entendres, my friends. 8D
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~~"Men are decievers ever one foot on land, and one in sea;to one thing constant never"~Shakespeare~
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